Friday, November 15, 2013

Drafts / Peer reveiw

Fracking Problem Thesis and Ideas
                Fracking has been in the United States for a while now, but just recently has it began making big headlines. With the way people live in America today there is an extremely high demand for oil and gas. With tensions in the middle-east the United States is trying to rely less on foreign countries for oil. This has led to an increase in interest for hydraulic fracking. Although hydraulic fracking could help relieve the high demand for energy in the U.S., it could also have major repercussions. Fracking wastes large amounts of water, contaminates the air, and pollutes water supplies.

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Fracking has been in the United States for a while now, but just recently has it began making big headlines. Fracking is on the move in the United States and could be coming to your backyard. With the way people live in America today there is an extremely high demand for oil and gas. With tensions in the middle-east the United States is trying to rely less on foreign countries for oil. This has led to an increase in interest for hydraulic fracking. Although hydraulic fracking could help relieve the high demand for energy in the U.S., it could also have major repercussions.
                Fracking seems like an easy solution to our energy crisis right? At first this sounds like a great idea, but once you look further into it there are major issues. A major problem with Fracking is water pollution. If fracking is such a danger to our water supply then it seems absolutely crazy to do it. A fact on DangersOfFracking.com is that there have been over 1,000 documented cases of water contamination next to areas of gas drilling as well as cases of sensory, respiratory, and neurological damage due to ingested contaminated water. If it harms people then it is insane to keep building fracking sites, especially around homes. With hundreds of chemicals being pumped into the ground to extract the natural gas from the rock it is easy for these chemicals to lake into water supplies and be pumped directly into households. If most people knew the danger that could be coming to their backyards then they would be irate.
                If fracking causes such issues with the water we drink then we are just killing ourselves. Gas and oil companies need to make people aware of the possible dangers before they start fracking in an area. With the rapid expansion fracking in the United States many grassroots organizations are fighting back. These organizations are trying to have anti-fracking laws passed within their states. Once people in future fracking areas realize the danger of fracking they will not want it in their local communities, but the important part is making everyone aware of the danger before it is too late. Although fracking can take some of the demand of oil from foreign countries, it is just not worth the risks.
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Find more evidence and examples to make a stronger statement.
Good conclusion, just restate intro and maybe add more evidence as well
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Make main point clearer. Make it easy to realize that the point is “people are not aware”.
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